Which Verse Best Ends the Song
- Option 1
- Option 2
- Option 3
How positive is too positive for a grunge/metal song?
I’m trying to finish something here, but my own lyrics are making me sick. It’s too happy a tune to do anything else, though.
Lyrically, it’s to be a short song, so only six short verses. You should be able to read the tune of it through the lyrics. There are a few possibilities for the last verse at the end.
“Deaf”
Sitting around the house,***
Watching TV with the sound turned way down;
Must be another way,
To make something worthwhile of today.
Maybe we just make it too easy,
Maybe we’re just not living it right;
I know you’re so happy to see me,
I wanna do something else tonight.
Walking out on the porch,
The rain falls but the drops make no sound;
Headlights turning this way,
Pretending I can’t hear what you say.
Maybe if you’d just speak more softly,
Maybe I wouldn’t tune it all out;
There’s something that you want to tell me,
I’ll not hear it even if you shout.
Living as though I’m deaf,
With the mute button pointed at you;
I’m going for a walk,
In the park where noone can ever talk.
(Three possible finishes-CHOOSE 1)
(Number One)
Maybe I’ll live forever this way,
Where I’ll never have to listen again;
If you try to tell me with your hands,
My eyes will close not to open again!
I’ve gone deaf
I’ve gone deaf
I’ve gone deaf to you (X2)
(Number Two)
Maybe if you’d just whisper to me,
Maybe I’d start to listen anew;
When that happens you must understand,
There’s still so much that I want to do.
(Number Three)
Maybe I’m just sick of listening,
Maybe I’m just sick of talking too;
I think that you’ll find it comforting,
You might really like to play deaf too.
***The first line of, “Good,” by Better than Ezra is, “Looking around the house.” I wrote the first line of this song knowing that, but not for that reason.
