a whisper

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a whisper

		I asked my mother what time it was
		at 2:46 p.m. on a slow Sunday afternoon
		and she replied, time for groceries.

		I asked my father what time it was
		at 7:45 a.m. on a crisp Saturday morning
		and he replied, time for pancakes.

		I asked my uncle what time it was
		at 9:45 p.m. on a yawning Tuesday night
		and he replied, time to stop asking questions.

		I asked my brother what time it was
		at exactly 10:00 a.m. on a Sunny Spring morning
		and he replied, time for papa's funeral.

		I asked my teacher what time it was
		at 2:05 p.m. on a same same same day
		and she replied, time to change the world.

		I asked my rabbi what time it was
		at 11:11 a.m. in our hopeful Saturday school
		and he replied, time to ask bigger questions.

		I asked my best friend what time it was
		at 10:20 a.m. in the school's cafeteria
		and he replied, it's all subjective.

		I asked my kid sister what time it was
		at 6:09 p.m. at our April family picnic
		and she replied, what is time?

		I asked myself what time it was
		on a dark, lonely Summer night,
		and something whispered in my ear,
		
		time to change a world. 
		
		What time is it? 5:07 a.m.
		What time is it? 5:09 a.m.
                  What time is it? 5:11 a.m.

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I don’t know why I put this piece up - I don’t really like it… but something in it was making it very hard for me to bury.

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I like it.

I feel like I would see it in a chain email or something… but still, I like it, and those sometimes.

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I don’t know why you don’t like this. The first time I read it I didn’t like the last stanza. But the second time I read it, I loved the last stanza.

This is good stuff.

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At the end you’ve skipped every other second. At that rate our time will run out more quickly than we want. It’s no wonder you don’t like (thinking about) it.

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deb,

Every other minute, but true none the less. Quite an insight, thank you.

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Hmmm, nice poem thang you got there, dude! I liked it. It was extremely well-written! =D>