Another cigarette
To take in the black
It helps me understand
Your need
For one night
Of release
The black
Reveals the light
It makes us feel
It helps us sense
It moves us to heal
Put out the smoke
Put away the fire
Drink down the water
And thirst no more
Be restored
To your divine essence
Your trinity
Born of flesh
Live in spirit
We are
-Thirst
Another great poem from you, thirst. Was the stanza structure reducing by a line from stanza to stanza in descending order from 6-lines for the 1st stanza to 1-line for the last stanza intentional? If not, it was a happy accident, but I have a suspiscion that this was by design and not circumstantial. Am I right? Whatever the case, this was a tight metaphor to explore and well-done at that.
lhw - AKA: The Straight-faced Clown AKA: M.C. Tape-Hiss
Wanting nothing,
With all your heart stop the stream
When the world dissolves,
Everything becomes clear.
Go beyond this way or that way,
To the farther shore
Where the world dissolves
And everything becomes clear.
Beyond this shore and the farther shore,
Beyond the beyond,
Where there is no beginning, no end,
Without fear, go.
A
Thanks LHW.
Yes, the stanza structure reduced by a line each time… though when I first started it, it wasn’t the intention. There was one more line at the end when I realized that it worked well without it…
LA, thanks.
-Thirst
So, it was sort of a combination between intentional design and happy accident (?). I like the effect both by how it looks, graphically, on the page and how it reads as your eyes go down the page.
lhw - AKA: The Straight-faced Clown AKA:M.C. Tape-Hiss