click on my new topic - validate my existence

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validate my existence

Touch your keyboard
click on my new topic
smiley smiley my post
validate my existence

Squash the mirror
made of plastic
you twisted cunt
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this probably won’t come as a surprise but i like the first two stanzas more than the third. the third seems to discuss a different topic. or, maybe, its the same topic: fakeness, artificiality…but the third stanza stops investigating and starts violently accusing. oh screw it, i just don’t like “you twisted cunt”.

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I dont know. I like it. Validation complete.

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at the risk of sounding discouraging, you seem to have rubbed elbowes with the wrong folks.

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…it does detract one from the piece, and I’m sure it’s meant to shock our senses, well, it did mine - you might have been better off omitting it, but it’s your piece/your choice, regardless.