HUMMINGBIRDS

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I fed the hummingbirds today.
I can’t for certain tell you why.
They’re such inspiring little birds.
I like to see them round me fly.

A brain small as a grain of rice;
A ‘finger’ flown by two inch wings;
To see them hover, dart about;
Is one of the most awesome things.

The Rufus has a bib that glows
Just like a pretty hologram.
And when he shows his neck to us
He says with beauty, “God I am”.

If two decide they can not share
They start to hover face to face
And then a helix they create
As they fly straight up into space.

Now as I think the more I feel
The reason why I like these birds;
They could be angels in disguise,
A flock of little flying words.

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I like the way this ends.

“They could be angels in disguise,
A flock of little flying words.”

Nice.

3

Beautiful, thoughtful poem! Much good Emily Dickenson influence here.

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A very well written poem! It makes you think and is also a pleasure to read.

Regards!

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Thanks rainey, Ierrellus and monad.It is gratifying to know I struck 3 common chords. I love the music in language.

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I’m with rainey on this one - you sell this poem with the last two lines.

lhw - AKA: The Straight-faced Clown AKA: M.C. Tape-Hiss

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Thanks lhw; but the poem is a gift.