Neurotica

[size=125]Neurotica[/size]

[size=109]She lost her name in the sea
overboard off the side,
it pulsates below
dragged in/out by the tide.
Just another Natasha
all fishnets and smiles
broken-loved mouth:
black rose that beguiles.

Click-clack/tick-tack
over the tiles to the sink
to hawk up old sperm
and wash off the stink
of dirty-dog paws
and manicured claws
uncaring caresses
and unsightly sores.

She looks in the mirror:
sees a fragment/a scatter
a gobble-groped quim
gnawed down to a tatter.
Breast-belly butt-thighs
a gross jumble of meat
fat finger-food buffét
grab all you can eat.

Squinted spotlighting
bright crescents of tears
brain raw and edgy
full of broken-tooth gears.
Fresh blood on her thighs
under lycra and lace
and burns on her nipples
to teach her her place.

Joe says that he loves her
as he brings down the cane
coming by every Tuseday
just to hurt her again.
It’s her eyes that he likes:
their Siberian haze
and her translucent skin
with its malnourished glaze.

He wraps her in cold-packs
and fills her with ice
puts blue on her lips
and inspects her for lice.
Swills pills by the fistful
and shaves all her hair
photographs all her angles
under a thousand-watt glare.

Chill flesh gone still now
pulse slowed in the vein
breathe in bare whispers
wracked rigid with pain.
He clambers onto and into

  • covers her like a shroud;
    she remembers her birth name
    and cries out aloud.[/size]

(speechless)

Nice title too

Formally, this is fantastic. The content, however, makes me feel a little sick.

Lyrically, nasty.

=D> [-X

Excellent use of the word ‘quim’ too. Assuming you weren’t referring to the Portuguese goalkeeper.

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Been brushing up the verse recently, mainly as I am too damned lazy to write anything longer.

And, at a pinch, I’d say its unlikely a common hooker would have a Portuguese goalkeeper in her pants…

…Or is it…? :astonished:

I have to say I really like this even if the content is somewhat disturbing. there were only a few parts i didnt like. rhyming parts didn’t really seem to fit with the rest of the poem, but other than that great job.

No shocks here,
But too much pity,
I figure.

Dan, that was almost a Haiku… :smiley:

Dan~ Haikus go like this: (And they aint Japanese)

[b]Bugs~
Bunny~

He’s an asshole~
I’d like to cut.~

Totally~
Full of shit.~

The dagger needs to split.~[/b]

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