Inter galactic
crash on a
train crossing over farmlands of Wales into the Hong Kong steal made from hands and
hooves
of Spanish decent. The same tales of united wonder, a single history traveling inside
slow wind descending from the milky way of
patterns directing the march of red ants inside a slice of bright green stalactite in an
immobile cave deep within Brazil. Digressing vernacular difference evens out in a doo
wop soprano battling
an alto made from tumbled seaweed slowing drifting into a heatless deep free from
every red
made angry
by Virginia creeper
reclaiming a fourteenth century cold battleground.
i like your stuff very much. i have to confess i rarely understand what you’re trying to say (a failure of mine no doubt) but i like reading it just the same. very enjoyable.
ha! i seriously doubt its your fault at all. i think maybe i’m too greedy with my poetry and i just say what i want with too little regard for whether or not i’m making sense to other people. i need to overcome this for sure.
I really enjoy reading your poetry. It’s very good, reminiscent of stream of consciousness… I like it. Also, upon reading the first few lines of this poem, I was immediately reminded of lyrics from the band the Mars Volta… just something it reminded me of.
If you’re trying to inspire dialogue, it’s not working.
Otherwise, you create pleasing arrangements of words.
Upon several re-readings, I can see an idea of something like the "oneness of things" emerging, and in this instance, your use of fractured imagery manages to fit well.
How did you compose this? That is, can you detail the process you went through to write this for me?
i am expressing dynamic interconnectivity. its not a particularly original theme, but its globalization as its experienced subjectivily. We are connected to eachother through world history, we ultimately share the same place. i am a particular expressing myself particularly, but about what is general and closer to universality.
i also tend to use math to guide me in terms of my format. in this case, algebra. i’m still working on the best way to incorporate algebra…you just reminded me.
this is a good question. you might find that my answer deserves criticism. please tell me what you think:
although i like free form poetry, i also really do love form. however, i feel that most forms are archaic, old, lyrical (couplets, limerick), and unsuited for contemporary literature.
so, i’ve decided to try creating my own form…a form that is part objective and partly subjective. so, i use math as a guide, but i pick the equation.
i don’t want to give all my tricks away…so i’ll leave it at that.
i like free form too, but i find it almost impossible to write. even if i start out that way, it seems that soon i pick up some kind of cadence, or find a few words that ought to rhyme (and it seems a shame to leave them unrhymed), or at least find some pattern of some description that i’ll repeat later in the poem.
personally, i am hesitant to be so quick to do away with the ‘archaic.’ but that’s me. i’m a traditionalist. i feel tradition is important…linking us to our past and providing continuity in the whole human drama of life. bringing the past to life in a sense and paying homage to all that has come before. i hope to hell shakespeare never goes out of style.
having said that, there’s nothing wrong with starting new traditions. (starting new traditions is actually kind of a tradition!). so i like very much that you’re creating your own form. keep ‘em coming. I enjoy your stuff.