you win 'em with the eyes

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boys. you win 'em with the eyes
that luscious look,
of yours
absorbing their
glistening
insecurities,
that half-smile
they un, intend
to give you
(beauty
is so fragile
with the power
of Charlemagne
10,000 soldiers
and a flavor
a scent
you win 'em
with the eyes

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I loved this poem. The imagery is perfect. =D>

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Thank you! You made my week. :slight_smile:

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You’re welcome!

In fact, I’ve liked all of your poems I’ve read thus far.

I just didn’t want to sound like a sycophant. :wink:

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I do enjoy your poem. I have had girls tell me that what often melts their hearts is a man that has penetrating eyes and a wonderful smile.

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Yes, penetrating eyes and a warm smile always do it for me. =D>

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OK, I’m officially a TUM groupy :blush:

(I’m not sure about starting and finishing a poem with the same line though? :-k I might have to leave it for a while and let it settle a bit…)